Name: Ameripuff (Signed) · Date: 22 Feb 2021 12:23 AM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

*Fairyland review thingy still*

By your own account, you've put years of effort into this story - and it shows.  It's really highly polished and I love the near constant flow of time as we move from chapter to chapter and day to day.  What I appreciated in this chapter is the character development - especially with the characters that haven't been prominent so far (Maude, Vesela).  As I mentioned before, it's the small details that bring life to these characters - like the way Maude holds her spoon upside down when she eats yogurt (must be a muggle thing - I do that too).  The way she spit on the mirror when Alba asked her about being kissed, and Vesela's backstory - helping to explain her fierce pride.  This is really a great read and I'm glad you came back to it eventually.  I had a similar journey, writing a story and then walking away from it for six years before finally coming back and finishing it.  I'll keep going.

-Drew

Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 21 Feb 2021 02:39 PM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

Oh man, she really leads him on, and then says "and he still didn't want me?" and then KISSES BEN?????? She is toying with this boy's emotions!!! Come on Alba, you gotta think this through! (I like Maude and Alba's friendship!!!) 

But she has to whip herself back into Tournament mode anyway, and that means getting off her potions :/ 

OMG she revealed that someone else put her name in!!! This is going to have all sorts of repercussions, but at least it will potentially start an investigation into who actually put the name in. Also, how does this keep happening???? Lol

thanks again

blackballet (for the Ice Otters)

Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 23 Nov 2018 12:20 AM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

Hi Chelts, here for BvB Team Bronze!! :) 

 

OKAY SO THAT ENDING HOLY CRAP!!! Honestly, I just can't even start there I have to go back to the beginning because you have TWO big events happening here!! First of all, I'M SO HAPPY BEN AND ALBA KISSED!!! Although the circumstances weren't perfect due to the mention of James and Chandra and Alba's ~feelings~ towards him, it was still wonderful. Very curious why Ben wasn't at breakfast the next morning, but no matter, I'm sure we'll find out soon enough. I love the idea of the "girl power" interview and Ginny turning it into something actually substantial (to the eventual chagrin of her editors). The insight into Vesela's character is lovely and makes me feel less annoyed by her character because we see why she acts the way she does. And then Alba just explodes with all of her built-up emotions and it's wriitten so well in that yes, she's basically screaming about all of the things that have gone wrong for her this school year and also in life in general, but the fact she reveals the biggest secret about herself regarding the Triwizard Tournament -- that's just the icing on the cake. I can't even wait to read what happens next so I'm moving on because this is such a HUGE cliffhanger!! Great job as always on this chapter!! :)

 

~MadiMalfoy x

Name: Danniclaire (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2018 06:40 AM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

I love this story, please keep writing. 

Author's Response:

Don't worry, we still have two more tasks honey!

Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 22 May 2018 09:40 PM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

Okay so I promised you I was going to review this once it was up, and it’s been a few days but I’m here now! I just read through the entire chapter again, and ugh it’s so good. I’m so happy that you’ve picked this up again, and I’m actually really amazed at how flawlessly you write in their voices after so many years! <3

 

First and foremost, BEN KISSED ALBA. WHAT. I mean, I ship these two very much, so I’m so so happy, but I can’t believe it actually happened!! This whole time, I thought Alba was too hung up on James to let someone else into her life, but it turns out that wasn’t the case, and I’m very, very happy. I hope Alba will continue to open herself up to other people other than James, like Ben and Maude, because I am very happy right now and so I have high ambitions for her.

 

Though I want to know…who did Chandra cheat on James with?? Not gonna lie, my first thought was Ben, because he sat there feeling miserable a few chapters ago, didn’t he? But I’m going to be an optimist for once and say that he wouldn’t do that, because he’s not the type of person to do that. Still, though. Chandra cheated on James??? Whaaat.

 

Also I loooved learning more about Vesela! I think it’s very impressive that she’s so capable, and that she managed to win this position with her own merit. Even if she is really terrible to Alba. The fact that even she didn’t seem to know why she was chosen as Companion made me super curious about it. I hope it’ll be revealed soon! I’m very eager to figure out this relationship between the two.

 

And then Alba’s part was my favorite scene of the section, when she was telling Ginny Weasley that there wasn’t any particular reason that she left her hair long other than the fact that she liked it. Because, like, while Ginny’s points about forced femininity in the public make sense to a degree, a lot of times, intersectionality isn’t considered too often in mainstream feminism. So I just really liked getting to see Alba’s take on that, and hearing her voice and opinion.

 

Such a good chapter! Thank you for picking this story up again! <3

 

~Eva

Name: BBHP (Signed) · Date: 21 May 2018 11:32 PM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

Just found this story and read it all in one go. I’m loving it so far! 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! Keep on checking back for more!

Name: dumbledore_wannabe (Signed) · Date: 21 May 2018 12:03 AM · For: Chapter 13: He Could be That Boy

Oh, I'm so happy you and Alba are back!  And glad she may be giving Ben a chance after all. I like him!  Should be interesting to see what happens with this unintended admission...

 

Author's Response:

We're back! and we will be back again soon!