Reviews For Twelve ways not to break the Bristlecone's Law


Name: WriteYourHeartOut (Signed) · Date: 16 Feb 2024 12:47 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hello! This is just adorable, isn't it? haha I think you did a good job with your first chat fic, as it can be very easy to lose track of who's talking, who's who, what's going on, etc, but I had an easy time following overall! You managaed to use names often enough to keep us on track, but not so often that the dialogue doesn't sound real. A lot of chat fics compensate by writing people's names SO many times throughout, when that's just not how people speak to each other, they don't say each other's name every sentence, you know? But you found that balance so we could still follow along with ease. The dialogue all sounded believable and true to character, too. This was just charming and funny, and thankfully did not work out, as that would have been very bad had Lily been under that spell - frankly, it may have been unforgivable if she's actually been the one to take it instead of Peter. Hilarious choice, by the way. Really well done, was just fun and enjoyable the whole way through!



Name: Predictable Chaos (Signed) · Date: 19 Feb 2023 02:48 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi, I'm here for the FFT Review.

Okay, that was hilarious. I spent half the time trying to figure out who said what and you know what? It really doesn't matter because they are one big quartet of mischevious mayhem.

 

I love the lines: Hospital Wing? Hospital Wing, like it was a forgone conclusion. Poor Madame Pomphrey. I often wonder how she knows how to treat it because they are so many different things that can be mixed into a potion.

 

As soon as I read the last line about 12 ways not to break it. I immediately thought of Edison's quote too. A great way to finish the ending.



Name: RogueSlytherin (Signed) · Date: 16 Feb 2023 06:01 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

I love that I can tell who wrote this - it's just so full of wit and laughter and snowball hugs <3 The technique of only using dialouge is interesting, I've not read something like that before but you pull it off! Even with so many characters I'm able to follow the action and the story along - and laughed more than once! 

Classic maurader mischief to try and break the rules! XD And I love the way one of the attempts was just straight to the hospital wing XD Even with just the dialouge you've captured the spirit of these troublemakers and put thier charms into every line <3 

<3 Review Event <3 



Name: RonsGirlFriday (Signed) · Date: 16 Feb 2023 05:08 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Here for mountain murder mystery! :D

 

Ohh how have I not read this one before?? I adore the way it's done in entirely dialogue! It has sort of a similar effect as a chatfic, except that it's all dialogue instead of texting, AND you don't expressly identify who is saying what, but the way you've written the dialogue it's very clear the entire time, and I think that's very skillful!! The dialogue only tells a complete story while keeping things punchy and fast-moving, and gives it a great feeling of chaos.

 

idk which is my favorite part, but: "Hospital Wing?" "Hospital Wing." is definitely in the top. XD

 

<3



Name: prideofprewett (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2022 10:48 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

This piece is just like everything else you write, so full of joy and wit and general hilarity! I think for a dialogue only piece, you did a magnificent job! It was clear who was speaking, and not just by naming people, but by their specific reactions to things that were happening. 

 

The idea of a love potion gone wrong and the Marauders being involved just makes total sense, really hah. I love how in the end it was Peter who accidentally took it. Love Potions are a little dubious what with their ability to not allow for consent, so I don't think this piece would have kept the same levity if they ended up being successful with giving her the love potion.

 

And great incorporation of an actual quote into this piece! I love when people do stuff like that and turn it magical or something. Really clever! 

 

Anyway, I absolutely loved this piece and it's such an excellent way to start my day! I can always count on your Marauders works to put me in a good mood!

 

<3 Courtney

 

TAG! (unless the gods have other plans) 



Name: PinsandKneazles (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2022 07:38 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hey Chiara! Here to catch you in tag :)

 

Ahh, I listened to the podcast of this story recently and really enjoyed it, so decided to visit the visual version too! <3 I love a dialogue-only format and it works really well with this story. The way it's constructed, in a similar way to how an experiment might be written out, is such a neat idea too <3

 

I love how Remus is brilliantly blunt in the beginning, when James asks for his help in creating a love potion to 'persuade' Lily to go out with him. Quite rightly, of course; it's highly unethical and maybe not even possible. But LMAO at James trying to justify it by saying it's in the name of science...you don't even study science, my friend!!! 

 

I'm curious as to what Bristlecone's law actually states...?

 

HAHAHA at 'isn't mixing too much Horklump juice with mistletoe explo...' I guess we have our answer right there!!

 

And my goodness, the pain and suffering James and his friends endure in the name of 'science' and in the pursuit of Lily, is just hysterical! But credit where credit's due; they (James) don't give up when they fall at the first hurdle. Instead, they insist on falling at the second, third, fourth, fifth, possibly more hurdles before they *think* they've finally cracked it. And here comes Lily...

 

 

...nah, here comes Wormtail instead LMAO!!! And the ending - 'twelve ways NOT to break the Bristlecone's law' - is exactly what science is all about...it's not failure, it's discovering lots of things that don't work here <3

 

Loved this! Thanks for sharing

 

Meera <3

 



Author's Response:

Hi again, Meera! :D

You've really been spoiling me with all these reviews... :P

I'm so glad you enjoyed listening to this for fic night and decided to check the written version too! :D Glad you liked the dialogue-only and the experiment format! :D It was a fun way to construct the story! :D

Ahahah! Glad you liked Remus' bluntness in the beginning! And no, it's not exactly ethical to use a love potion... :P But it's for science... :P

So, Bristlecone's Law... I don't have an exact enunciate, but basically it states that magic cannot create certain basic elements like life and love. You can create very close imitations, like Amortentia, or when you transfigure inanimate objects in animals (my headcanon is that you don't actually create a living creature, just a good imitation of it, and viceversa when you transfigure a living creature into something inanimate, the thing still conserves its life and conscience, but it's sort of frozen in the inanimate thing, if that makes sense?) I've tried to come up with an actual enunciate for it, and I sort of wanted to find a third thing starting with L, but I couldn't figure out what, lol! :P Anyway, imagine it as the primary law, and the exceptions to Gamp's Law are a corollary of it. ;)

Mixing too much Horklump juice with mistletoe is explosive, yes, we just had practical evidence :P

James won't surrender at the first obstacle... nor at the second, or the third, or the eleventh... :P

Ahahah! Poor Pete... :P Yes, that's what science is about! I always loved that Edison quote! :D

Thank you so much for the great review! <3

Chiara



Name: javu (Signed) · Date: 26 May 2021 07:40 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hey here for our review swap! 

 

So I've never read a fic of just dialogue... gotta say, I'm inspired to give it a go! After the first few sentences, I was a little hesitant to see how this would go, with just dialogue, but once I was onto #2 I realized it was really cool way to write a fic. I don't think it woud work as a novel... but as a funny one-shot it really draws you in as a reader and yeah, it works well. I enjoyed the style. 

 

I LOVED the twist at the end of Peter accidentally drinking the love potion instead of Lily!! (like didn't they realize the hardest part was probably going to be getting Lily to actually drink it? lol). And Peter kiseed James - LOLOL. I'm torn of wanting of reading it as a normal story incuding narrative, but at the same time not having narrative makes it a really cool affect. Because I didn't "see" the kiss happen but it was told to me through dialogue, and because it was that way it made it really funny. Though I'm sure it would have been funny through narrative as well. 

 

Going off of that, what made it funny (tho to be fair it was a funny plot anyways) was the just dialogue. "... are those scales?" hahaha. 

 

Overall, very enjoyable read! Sorry for the belated review.



Author's Response:

Hi! :D

I am very much a dialogue person, but I had never attempted to write a dialogue-only fic before... but it is a fun way to write a story, and it can be fun to read, too, if done well! You should give it a go! ;)

Ahahah! Poor Peter... :P (Yeah, they should've known Lily would never fall for it... :P) Ahahah! Yeah, he did kiss James... lol... I'm sure it would've been fun through narrative as well, but I'm glad the comicity came through well this way! :D

So glad you enjoyed reading! Thank you so much for the lovely review and the swap! <3

Chiara



Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 19 Apr 2021 04:53 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Still continuing my prize reviews! I can't believe I haven't reviewed this one before :O

 

I didn't realise this was just dialogue, either! Amazing! Your dialogue is always so good so I know I'm really going to enjoy this story!

 

The experimenting part has me cracking up, it is just SO GOOD omgggg. I loved the montage-like sequence and trying to imagine what kind of mess they were making was just so amazing haha. And Peter drinking it by accident HAHAHA! It was a perfect conclusion to a really well-rounded, fun story. I loved this so much!



Author's Response:

Hi again, B! :D

And yay, I knew you would enjoy this one! ;)

And yes, just dialogue! Glad you are excited about the style choice! :D

I'm so glad you found the experimenting part amusing, and that you liked the montage-like sequence! :D Poor Peter, drinking it accidentally... :P I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! <3



Name: livingfree (Signed) · Date: 05 Oct 2020 12:01 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

I love James's way of thinking at the end where he switches it up by saying he didn't fail. He found 12 ways how not to break it. Haha, the dialogue in this was very amusing and I enjoyed the snapshots we got of each attempt based on what they said. You really captured the essence of the marauders and how they interact here.



Author's Response:

Hi! Thank you so much for stopping by! :)

Well, that's typical James though, isn't it? He never fails (and if he does, he'll find a way to turn it into a success... :P)

I'm so glad you liked the dialogue and my portrayal of the Marauders! :D

Thank you so much again for the review!



Name: mymischiefmanaged (Signed) · Date: 19 May 2020 04:58 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi Chiara!

 

Here for our swap very very late sorry! But this story really caught my eye - love some marauders and I love the way you've done it all through dialogue. 

 

It's so clever how you've managed to get all the different voices across without all the dialogue tags. In that phase 1 section it was immediately so clear who was speaking, and it made me smile seeing Remus struggling to control his wayward friends and Peter's insecurities coming through.

 

Phase 2 and everything going wrong made me laugh, especially the 'Hospital wing? Hospital wing' exchange. They don't seem too worried about the damage that they've caused, and that fits in with the kind of casual, friendly arrogance we see in them in canon.

 

Getting little glimpses into the different stages of testing was a good way to tell the story. You've given an overall picture of it not going very well without writing the same thing over and over. It reminded me of a montage scene in a film.

 

Aw poor Peter. I'm glad Sirius enjoyed it. I'm also glad he didn't actually use the potion on Lily, because I'm not sure she would have been too happy with him once she got over it. This way they all had a laugh and nobody really got hurt.

 

This was lovely Chiara! Thank you for the swap <3

 

Emma xx

 



Author's Response:

Hey, Emma! It's so lovely to have you here! <3

I'm so happy you picked this one! And that you enjoyed the dialogue only format! :D I love Marauders (as I'm sure you've guessed) and I'm so glad you liked them here! <3

Ah, thank you! I'm a dialogue-y person in general, but I'd never done dialogue-only before, so it's great to know that the voices were recognizable and that their personalities shined through! :D

I'm so glad phase 2 made you laugh! It was definitely meant to be ridicolous! :P No, they are not particularly worried about the damage they're doing, to the classroom or to themselves... but that's why we love them so much, isn't it? ;) Glad you enjoyed the snippet format in this section, too! :D

Poor Peter, indeed! :P At least Sirius had fun! :P Yes, it's probably a good thing that Lily didn't drink the potion, she definitely wouldn't have been impressed... ;)

Thank you so much for swapping and for the lovely review! <3

Snowball hug,

Chiara



Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 07 Mar 2020 06:55 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

The title of this fic is just so perfect. I feel like this is an iconic hpft story, even though it’s fairly recent and I shamefully had no idea what it was actually about, or that it was dialogue only. *couch* I’m very glad I checked it out though, you’ve really nailed all the elements here!

 

I absolutely love the structure of this, with how you laid out the different phases of the experiment. It tied well to the theme of the story, and helped give the dialogue clarifying structure that didn’t quite cheat into being description.

 

I am really impressed that you managed to include all of the Marauders in this. Dialogue-only is challenging enough with just two characters, and you managed to really smoothly include FOUR distinct voices.

 

I was somehow really amused by your use of “...” because they made me think of unamused emoticons, which was kind of perfectly fitting

 

Wait, I just googled it, and is Bristlecone’s Law not a real thing in Harry Potter? That just goes to show how iconic this story title is, because I fully believed it was a real part of the potterverse. I’m shook. And now I need to know what Bristlecone’s Law clearly states, cause James cut Remus off from filling us in there.

 

The experiments section was HILARIOUS. You really nailed the comedy here, and I especially liked the hilarious brevity of the Madam Pomfrey section.

 

“No, thanks. Bye.” What a legend, Lily Evans.

 

A love story potion could’ve easily become very creepy, but you safely kept it away from that territory. 

 

I am going to headcanon that the love potion was not successful, and Peter was either trolling them, or taking advantage of the moment because he was secretly in love with James.

 

This whole fic was honestly so fun, and I am so glad that I finally checked it out!

 

Snowball hug!

 

Sam.



Author's Response:

SAM!!!

Ah, I always so love receiving reviews from you, they are always so clever!? <3

I would've never thought of this being iconic... :P I just tried to come up with something extremely silly for the HC opener... :P But I'm so, so glad you enjoyed it! <3

I'm so glad you liked the "scientific project" format! And that it helped structuring the scenes without ruining the only-dialogue format! :P

Yeah, I guess it was a bit tricky, having all four Marauders... hopefully it wasn't confusing... :P

Ahahah! "..." does look like an unamused emoticon! :P

Ahahah! Yeah, my bad! :P Okay, I don't know the exact enunciation of Bristlecone's law, but the concept is that there are some founding elements (life, love, possibly others) that cannot be created/reproduced by magic. You can make very good imitations of the thing (like when you transfigure inanimate objects into animals, or Amortentia), but you cannot create the actual thing. Does it make sense?

I'm so glad you found the experiments' section hilarious! Especially the Madam Pomfrey bit! :D

Ahahah! Yes, Lily is a legend! :D

A love potion could become creepy, yes, but this was really meant to be just plain silly! :P

Okay, I love your idea that Peter was pretending because he was secretly in love with James! :P (I mean, we both know Peter only has eyes for Remus, but I'll make an exception for this... :P)

This review is just brilliant and I love you so much!

Snowball hug,

Chiara



Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 12 Feb 2020 06:53 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

HAPPY CHIARA APPRECIATION MONTH. You deserve all the love in the world, so I am here to poke through your AP and find stories of yours that I have not reviewed yet. :P

 

How could I ever forget this fabulous House Cup opener one-shot! The choice of using a dialogue-only format to communicate the silly, slightly morally questionable actions of our dear Marauders was such a good decision—it works so well with this kind of story! While descriptions could very easily slow down the pace of the disasters (after disasters after disasters :P), the dialogue speeds us right along as the Marauders hurdle headfirst into life-threatening mistakes and catastrophic potions.

 

You write their antics so so well—I love how they just all kinda scramble to talk over one another, how they speak in very quick and short bursts (since, I presume, their minds and bodies are going too fast for them to really sit down and speak in elongated paragraphs :P), how funny and endearing they all are! Though a love potion is by nature a somewhat immoral potion, you really make their quest to create one work, with Remus being the reasonable, rational, moral one…and for James to finally realize that Bristlecone’s Law is not to be broken at the end hahaha.

 

I LOVE how the numbers of their experiments jump around because there are simply too many for them to remember and/or actually count properly hahaha. And each one was so funny, especially since you timed them just right so that the out-of-contextness made everything that much more hilarious. I walked into each one not knowing what the next ‘failure’ (or, as James would put it, ‘success in determining what would not work’ :P) was going to be like, and each one did not disappoint! From the scales to the too-green color to Madam Pomfrey to crying, I was smiling the whole way!

 

The ending “Goodnight” had me cracking up!! I love this story so much, it really picked me up this late at night! (It’s nearing 2 a.m. for me, haha.)

 

I love you!! I’m so glad that you’re recognized this month! <3

 

Love,

Eva



Author's Response:

EVA!!! <3 <3 <3

You are the absolute best, you know it, don't you? <3

Ah, I'm so glad you enjoyed this silly one-shot, and the dialogue-only format! :P I didn't think about the quick pace thing, but I guess you are totally right! Those boys are real hurricanes, are they not? :P

Ahahah! I mean, can you imagine the Marauders speaking in elongated paragraphs? :P Oh, my... I might've just had a plunny... what's happening tonight? :O Anyway, I'm so glad you liked my boys and their quest (even if, yes, not exactly moral...) and how James had to admit failure in the end (except that he didn't... :P)

I'm so glad you liked the randomness and the disastrousness of their attempts! :P And poor Madam Pomfrey, I wouldn't have wanted to be her... :P

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed this so much! <3

Love you loads!!! <3 <3 <3

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Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 01 Feb 2020 04:56 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

 

Chiara!

 

This piece is so cool! I love what you've done with such a general prompt. I think the marauders/potion gone wrong is really what the world needed honestly. 

 

I think it's awesome that you've really tried something different and outside of your comfort zone perhaps. I think doing just dialogue can be really tricky sometimes to make the story clear and fleshed out in a natural way but I thought you really nailed that for me. I really like how you've chosen to use the dialogue because I think it helps the reader uses some of their imagination to get the idea about what it looks like (it looks hilarious in my mind!) while still giving all the information that we use for the story.

 

I think you've always been quite good at dialogue and this really proves that. I thought you did a really great job at getting all the marauder's voices right and it was always obvious who was talking at any point. I'm not surprised that it was James and Sirius idea first, that's very in character :P I love the banter between them and it all bounces off each other so nicely. I did laugh out aloud at this fic (leo is looking at me like I'm crazy!)

 

I thought the way you structured it was really cool like it was proper science project right up. This whole piece was just a delight to read. It was funny and clever. You always make me fall in love with the marauders whenever I read your stuff!

 

Abbi xx

 



Author's Response:

Abbi!!!

Hello again!!! <3 <3 <3

Ah, I'm so glad you enjoyed this little, silly piece! Yes, I agree, Marauders and potion gone wrong are just the best match! :P

I'm so glad you felt the dialogue-only style worked! :) I'm normally more comfortable writing dialogue, but I'd never done exclusively dialogue before and, yes, it can be tricky... I'm glad you could picture the scene in your mind, and that it looked hilarious (that's definitely how I wanted it to feel like!) ;)

I'm so glad all the voices felt distinct and recognizable, and that you enjoyed their banter! Of course it would be James and Sirius' idea! (Actually, just James' idea, but Sirius went along with it :P) Ahahah! Poor little Leo! (How is he, btw? <3 I would really love to meet him in person at some point! <3)

I'm so glad you liked the structure, too! I wanted to give it a proper science project vibe! ;) Thank you so, so, so much for this stunning review, I'm so happy you enjoy my Marauders so much! <3

Big snowball hug,

Chiara

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Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 26 Jan 2020 10:10 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi Chiara!

 

I've never been brave enough to try and write a story that's only made up of dialogue, but you did a fantastic job of it.  And not only did you choose to write a conversation (or conversations) between two characters, you had four different voices in the mix here, just to set yourself even more of a challenge.  The Marauders were a great choice for this, though - not just because you're so wonderful at writing them, but because they're four characters who play off each other so naturally anyway that this piece flowed really well and I didn't find it confusing at all to follow the different speakers.

 

Honestly, this story made me laugh so much.  You capture the Marauders so well - even without any description in this piece, I could see Remus's exasperation as he tried to convince James of why it was such a bad idea to try and create a love potion for Lily, and Sirius's amusement, and Peter's embarrassment.  The fact you captured all of those things in so few words was really impressive.

 

I think my favourite part of this story had to be all the different attempts that they made on their "project".  Like Remus, I could have told them it was a bad idea at the very beginning, but I really enjoyed seeing the different attempts at creating the potion and the many ways that it went wrong.  I can only imagine the Healer in the hospital wing getting more and more exasperated when James keeps turning up with potions related injuries - and scales....  These four are definitely what I can imagine Harry and Ron being like if they hadn't had to focus on fighting Voldemort through school instead!

 

The ending really made me laugh as well.  After seeing all of that effort going into making the potion and then Lily completely avoiding the situation entirely, almost as if she knew not to accept a drink of pumpkin juice from James Potter (I can't possibly imagine why!).  And then Pete - I actually felt sorry for Pete here, but it did make me laugh to see him falling for James the same way that Ron fell for Romilda Vane after the Love Potion!

 

Sian :)



Author's Response:

Sian!!! <3 <3 <3

I'm so glad the only dialogue worked well and didn't feel confusing! I love my boys a lot, and yes, they do play off each other so well! Glad you enjoyed it! :D

I'm also so glad this made you laugh! :) And that you could visualize the scene and imagine the characters' reactions even without the description! :)

It was a really bad idea to begin with... but yes, all their failed attempts were really fun to write! :P Poor Madam Pomfrey... :P

Lily is too smart... I wonder why she wouldn't accept a drink of pumpkin juice from James...? :P And yes, poor Pete... but it was funny from an external point of view... :P

Thank you so much for the lovely review, my dear! <3



Name: MegGonagall (Signed) · Date: 17 Dec 2019 10:51 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hey lovely! I'm stopping by with another gift for the Rager! 

 

Oh my goodness, this was so funny. Literally, I laughed out loud several times reading this. Especially when Sirius was like, "I have nothing better to do anyway," because I imagine that is how most of their antics went. James has an idea, Remus tells them why it's stupid, Peter agrees with Remus, and Sirius is bored so decides yolo hahaha. James exclaiming now not everything he does is because of Lily was great. But my absolute favorite was "Potter... Black... Do I even want to know?" "No, Madam Pomfrey, you don't." I lost it at that. 

 

All of the attempts were just funnier and funnier. But the fact that Peter drank it, exclaimed his love for James and KISSED him, was the icing on the cake. Just too, too funny. I know I've said it dozens of times, but the way that you just get the Marauders' characters is astounding. 

 

Also, I know that dialogue only is really difficult, and I thought you did a great job of making it flow, easy to follow, and painted a great picture through just their words. This was really great, and again, so freaking funny. I'm glad I chose this to read! 

 

Happy Holidays, love!! 

Meg



Author's Response:

MEG!!!

Thank you so much for stopping by with this lovely gift, I really appreciated it so much! <3

I'm so glad this made you laugh! :D And yes, that's 100% how their antics would go! :D Ahahah! No one believes it, James... :P And yes, poor Madam Pomfrey... :P

I'm glad you liked all the failed attempts! And then Peter drinking the potion by accident (and everything that came from it... :P) Ah, thank you! You write the Marauders super well yourself!!! <3

I'm so glad dialogue only worked well! And that you had so much fun reading this!

Thank you so, so much again!

Snowball hug,

Chiara



Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2019 07:10 AM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi Chiara! :) 

 

I’m here with your requested review from a couple weeks ago. This was a cute piece for the Opener, and it definitely put a smile on my face when I was reading it for judging! Even though you say in your author’s note at the end that this is your first attempt at writing a “dialogue only” piece, you do a remarkably good job with it! You give yourself scene breaks but they don’t feel abrupt, rather natural, especially as you’ve managed to fit twelve of them in the span of about 500 words. I also love the tie-in to Thomas Edison -- being a scientist myself, I was really happy with the way you chose to go about using this prompt for the Opener & how James executed his plan. The Marauders having to come up with excuses why they have to go to the Hospital Wing is hilarious, especially when Madam Pomfrey just gives up asking why and treats them. I like that you ended it with James being successful with his potion creation, but having Peter accidentally drink the spiked pumpkin juice and then having them die of laughter after the whole ordeal is over. Such a comedic piece, and you did a wonderful job with it! :) 

 

~Madi



Author's Response:

Hi, Madi, dear! Thank you so much for stopping by! <3

I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece for the Opener! And that you felt the all dialogue worked well! :D (Fitting everything in 500 words was a real struggle... :P)

I'm really glad you liked the Thomas Edison "quote" and the "scientific" aspect of the story! I had a lot of fun imagining how James' experiments would go! :P

Poor Madam Pomfrey... those four must've driven her crazy... :P And poor Peter, too... :P

Thank you so much again for the lovely review! <3



Name: DanyFire (Signed) · Date: 07 Nov 2019 11:25 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi there! It's DanyFire aka Meg for our swap!

This was an entertaining read. I loved how you wrote this. I was just visualizing the scenes as I read them. It made me laugh. I needed that laugh today. You are a great writer! Keep writing so well! I love your stories.

 

Hugs,

Meg



Author's Response:

Hey, there, Meg! :)

I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece and that it made you laugh! :D I love the Marauders and their shenanigans and I'm glad this lifted your spirit a little! ;)

Thank you so much for swapping and for the kind words!

Chiara



Name: MalfoysAngel (Signed) · Date: 08 Oct 2019 09:31 PM · For: The scientific method... according to the Marauders

Hi Chiara, 

I'm sorry this is so late but I'm here for both the review request you left me and the Hufflepuff review swap. 

I had to read this during the judging phase for the HC opener and I loved it then (I love it now too just so you know)! I think it's a unique take on the prompt and think you did an excellent job with writting all dialogue. 

The interactions were sometimes hard to follow who was speaking and to whom but once I read through it a second time, it got easier. Sometimes when writing all dialgoue, you need to indicate which of your characters are speaking and who they are speaking to, especially in stories like these when there are 4 individuals. 

I also want to know some of the other methods James tried that didn't work since there are only a few listed. I know that with such a limited word count, there was no way to get all of them in, but I would like to see this expanded into a possible one shot and beyond just to see more Marauder potion mishaps. 

This is a great drabble and I really enjoyed reading it. I want...no I NEED more of this story. 

 

Great Job!

Peace, Love, and Tacos

Tasha



Author's Response:

Hi Tasha! Thank you for stopping by! :)

I'm so glad you enjoyed this little story! A potion creation gone wrong kind of called for Marauders, don't you think? :P Glad the dialogue-only worked too, even if it felt a bit confusing at times! :)

Ahahah! I had to cut a lot to fit into the 500 words limit... maybe one day I'll write the extended version... :P

Thank you so much again for the lovely review! <3



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