Reviews For bloodshot


Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 19 Mar 2022 05:57 PM · For: mulberries

Hi there, here for the galazy review event!!

 

I love the first paragraph, how much detail you fit in there and how much depth there is. Even though it's a dark environment, I feel like it's very vivid. I don't if that's becaues you start with 'bloodshot' or not, but I'm imagining this world of dark buildings with bright lights and living shadows. It's so effective. 

 

And then the lipstick stains on the glass, 'bright like blood' is such beautiful phrasing, i love it. The description of the print on the glass, from different lips, it draws us in so well. And the blurring image really reminds of the way the city is viewed, through a smoke screen of sorts.

 

I love the description "warm and weary" to describe a sort of homecoming. It's like a long day after work. The certainty that she knows you love her is another line i love <3 you fit such wonderful descriptions into such a short piece

 

thank you for this!!

Catherine



Name: RogueSlytherin (Signed) · Date: 19 Mar 2022 03:24 PM · For: mulberries

Galazy Reviewing :D :D :D 

 

This is beautiful and painful and wonderful and pretty and sad. How is it all the things in less than 300 words? Such an awesome and powerful drabble you've got here. I really really enjoyed it. There is so much vivid description and like emotion even tied into it all with so few words :chefs kiss: 

 

I love how you brought in the prompt of red also. It's not just a color in this piece, it's an emotion, it's their connection, it's what's unspoken. And both-both-both I love the repition of words here and then later on with chocolate-smoked fruit as a way to describe the night - it's all just so vivid and incredible. 

 

- Jacquelin



Name: dreamshadow (Signed) · Date: 17 Nov 2021 10:24 PM · For: mulberries

lauraaa dear i'm here for our swap!

 

this was absolutely stunning and also incredibly painful, but that's no surprise because you're just that talented. even in such a short piece you manage to capture something tragic and make me feel things in less than 250 words. also that last line?? particularly the 'with the steadiness and certainty and you know that she knows that you love her'??? honestly gave me chlils

 

i also really resonated with the line and 'her fingers, absent and cold, trace thin broken-heart lines on her arm, up by her elbow where no one ever goes' because i feel like it really captures the pain our narrtaor is in

 

your writing is gorgeous and poetic and deep and i just really want you to know that ♥



Name: grumpy cat (Signed) · Date: 02 Mar 2021 06:03 PM · For: mulberries

i love this so much i need you to know that, you're an amazing writer and i'm so happy i read this even though it also hurts my soul but but it's still beautiful and i love it.



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